From c44f8a7abd43c634274a9250689ac4a91075b4f3 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: jpotusek Date: Sun, 2 Apr 2017 14:33:04 -0700 Subject: [PATCH] revisions to chapter 5 Minor rewrites to chapter 5: Here's a bit of money to get you started --- text/text.md | 13 +++++++------ 1 file changed, 7 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-) diff --git a/text/text.md b/text/text.md index 4595666..f90ca7d 100644 --- a/text/text.md +++ b/text/text.md @@ -303,14 +303,15 @@ Here's a bit of money to get you started *revise and rewrite* -That's what they told me, and gave me the ten thou. And a neat and very official looking printout of where this marvel could be found, since, to top all +That's what they told me, and gave me the ten thou. And a neat and very +official looking printout of where this marvel could be found, since, to top all that, it didn't stay in a single place, but kept moving all over the -map. Along with a circus. +map. Along with the circus. "A circus?" I asked. "What's its act? Bite chicken heads off?" I asked them. "As far as we know, it could rip off the head of something considerably -bigger than a chicken." Talking-guy said, while Fists-means-business +bigger than a chicken." Talking-guy said, while Fists-that-mean-business smiled in a nondescript way. "But yes, we are pretty sure it can do that too." @@ -319,14 +320,14 @@ shook hands and looked each other deep into our eyes. Can't remember the color, they were rather nondescript. White around and darker stuff in the middle, all I can remember. After that I told them I would take it from there, and they were on -their way and I never ever saw them again, and I won't until I do the +their way. Never ever saw them since, and I won't until I do the delivery in a few days. Now that I've got what they want I'll have to -look for them when I arrive at my destination. Or rather they will +look for them when I arrive at my destination. Or rather, they will look for me. Whatever, that's not going to be today. No, tonight I'm not gonna tell you about my joining the circus either. Which, by the way, at that precise -moment I didn't really think it was going to be necessary. +moment I didn't really think was going to be necessary. Duke of Poo tells his story --------------------------------